More signs I should be more careful with my choice of words! ;)
I think it is very good as it is. I would like to see it made a little longer, but that's more personal preference—wanting to know more about this bard and how he ended up there—than anything else, and I don't think the piece suffers at all from being as short as it is. On the contrary—you've managed to write something very short that packs a helluva punch and conveys the story quite neatly without seeming as though it ends too abruptly.
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Date: 2014-03-31 05:52 am (UTC)I think it is very good as it is. I would like to see it made a little longer, but that's more personal preference—wanting to know more about this bard and how he ended up there—than anything else, and I don't think the piece suffers at all from being as short as it is. On the contrary—you've managed to write something very short that packs a helluva punch and conveys the story quite neatly without seeming as though it ends too abruptly.